Wonderful Writing

WALT: finish the story starter 
Today we had to finish the story starter on these mysterious circles the story starter said She had been tracking the deer. Her parents had taught her how.One hour before, finding the hoof prints in the soft earth, she had followed the trail of broken twigs and occasional nibbled leaf until she had located it. Creeping slowly and quietly, not making even the slightest sound, she remained undetected.She had stumbled across the mysterious circles in a clearing in the forest, and watched as the deer approached them. With a slight twitch of its ears, the deer stepped indifferently through the first circle, and vanished. Completely vanished.
The girl let out a gasp, and walked towards the circles to investigate… 

As she stepped through the circle her heart raced then, there she stood, in front of a beautiful forest, the trees were bright pink and the deer that she had previously saw turned into a bright dragon with lovely big red flowing wings and lovely glowing horns , she had stumbled across the most lovely land ever. 

She started to walk to a lovely castle on a big mountain with lovely water flowing down the edge.It was paradise The castle had a glass window with stained glass in the shape of a rose with word’s above reading “the rose of the valley “ It must be a flower from heaven, the castle was huge it had a large Golden gate leading to the castle with flowers of all shapes and sizes, there was one that caught her eye it was so big full of powder and purple you go over to it and then you sniff and it smelt like cooking, an apricot pie, the suddenly she woke up in a bed a lovely wooden bed, she said to herself, that was a magical dream then she looked out of the window and realised it wasn’t a dream after all.